here are quite few of writing error such as the first emptyness. it should be spell like this 'emptiness'
ehco, 'Echo"
foriegn, "foreign"
style of writing, it was like a futuristic way of writhing. it is cool.but the utilization of your punctuation mark is nearly zero..i would wish for you to use more of that.
this is like the fiction type of paragraph..
i would wish that this is a real deal..
i would rather wish that you perfected your style of writing..it is a simple one..punctuation mark is essential to break the word out so that it provide a diversion so that people would have the target idea..
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